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The pie charts show the average household in two different countries Japan and Malaysia.The two nations show broadly similar patterns,though there are some differences,both significantly and minor.
One of the most important aspects of this data that housing expenses in Malaysia are much higher if compared to Japan.Similarly,the percentage of spending food in slightly higher in Malaysia(27%)than from Japan(24%).However,Japan spend more on other service,at 29%,while Malaysia spend 26% at transport.Japan allocates 20%of its household budget to transport ,which is twice as much as Malaysia(10%) Another difference is healthcare expenses are low in both countries,with Malaysia spending only 3%compared to Japan 6%.
Housing is the highest expenditure category in Malaysia,while other goos services dominate spend in Japan.Transport and healthcare expenses differ significantly between the two nations.
The essay presents a clear overview but lacks some logical flow. Some sentences are not well-connected, leading to minor confusion.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve the flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Clarify comparisons between countries.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety. Some word choices are repetitive or inaccurate.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task and summarizes the main features of the data. However, some comparisons could be clearer.
Suggestions
- Ensure all comparisons are clear and accurate.
- Include more detailed analysis of differences.