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The map illustrates how village which is called Ryemouth develop over thirty years. Overall, there have been some changes such as; elimination of fishing, changes with sport, noticeable changes related with accommodation.
In 1995, northern section of the town was dominated by farmland and forest park while western side filled with housing. The center of the park, there was shop and where near the fish market along side the fishing port. The southern part of the map located hotel and café
By 2025, the number of housing has increased by several and the road was widened to west. The side where located of the east corner farmland and forest park demolished, instead of built golf, tennis area. In the central area, the shop and fish market have been replaced by a restaurant and fishing port has been removed. Additionally, a car park has been built next to the hotel in the southeast.
The essay provides a basic comparison of the two maps but lacks clear organization and logical flow.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
- Ensure logical connectors are used to guide the reader through the description.
- Clarify the sequence of changes over time.
The vocabulary is adequate but somewhat repetitive and lacks precision.
The essay has frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, affecting clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed description and analysis of the changes shown in the maps.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about the changes.
- Ensure all major changes are covered and explained.
- Provide a clearer overview of the developments.