You are looking for a full-job, and recently you saw a job opening in an advertisement. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like to do and say what experience and skills you have
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express for the in advertised in local,,Zarafshon” newspaper.My name is Dilnoza an 19 years old.I have been working as an secretary for the past one year at Fayz‘s supermarket in Andijan.My responsibilities calculate fast and very developed communication skills.
I am also personally very interested in your company while working full-time job opening. I will require a letter of a letter of reference from you which I need to furnish at the time of full the new workplace.
I would be pleased to supply you with any further information during the interview.
Yours faithfully,
Dilnoza Ulmasova
The letter is somewhat organized, but the flow of information is not entirely clear. The introduction, body, and conclusion are not well-defined, and there is some repetition and unnecessary information. The use of cohesive devices is limited, affecting the overall coherence.
Suggestions
- Use cohesive devices appropriately to ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
- Avoid repetition and unnecessary information in order to maintain a clear and concise flow of information.
The letter uses a basic range of vocabulary, but there are some awkward and incorrect word choices. The writer uses some simple vocabulary that is not always used accurately. There are some errors in word choice and collocation (e.g., “calculate fast,” “very developed communication skills”). The writer uses very simple vocabulary, and the word choice is sometimes repetitive or incorrect. Spelling and word formation errors are present, which can affect the clarity of the writing.
The letter demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures. There are several grammatical errors, including issues with sentence structure, verb tense, and punctuation. The letter uses a limited range of grammatical structures, and there are numerous grammatical errors. Errors in verb tense and sentence structure are prevalent (e.g., “I am also personally very interested in your company while working full-time job opening”). Punctuation and spacing errors are present, affecting the overall readability of the letter.
The letter partially meets the requirements of the task. The writer introduces themselves, explains the type of job they are seeking, and provides some information about their experience and skills. However, the letter does not fully meet the requirements of a formal job application. The writer does not provide enough detail about the job they are applying for, and the information provided is not always relevant or appropriate. The letter is also not structured as a formal job application and does not follow the typical format and conventions of such documents. The writer’s age (19 years old) is mentioned, which is unusual in a job application and may raise questions about suitability.
Suggestions
- Ensure that the information provided is relevant and sufficient for the job application.
- Follow the typical format and conventions of a job application letter.