You have received a bag. Write a letter to the owner of the bag. In your letter include - where you found the bag - what are the materials in the bag - tell him how he can take the bag from you
DEAR ABDUSATTOR
I AM WRITING THIS LETTER TO INFORM YOU ABOUT A BAG, WHICH YOU LOST.
I WORK AS A SELLER IN THE CLOTHES SHOP EXCEPT FROM MY STUDIES AT THE UNIVERSITY. A COUPLE OF THE DAYS AGO, WHILE I WAS GOING TO WORK, I SUDDENLY CAME ACROSS AN UNUSUAL BAG NEAR THE SHOP. INITIALLY, I WAS INTO NOTHING, NAMELY HOW WAS A BAG; HOWEVER IT ATTRACTED ME A LOT BECAUSE IT SEEMED AS LUXURY THING WITH BRIGHT COLOUR.
WHEN I OPENED THE BAG WITH AN INTEREST, THERE WERE SOME VALUABLE ITEMS AND NECESSARY DOCUMENTS, SUCH AS ID CARD, MONEY, PLASTIC CARD AND PHONE MADE IN CHINA, ALL OF WHICH MIGHT BE PRECIOUS FOR YOU, I THOUGHT.
I AM CURRENTLY TENANT AND STAY IN NEAR MY STUDY PLACE. AT PRESENT, I AM PLANNING TO MOVE ANOTHER PLACE TO LIVE AND FIND NEW JOB, THEREFORE WITHIN 3 DAYS, YOU HAVE TO CONTACT ME, OTHERWISE, A BAG MAY BE LEFT IN SOMEWHERE. IF YOU CANNOT COME TO THE SHOP OR MY APARTMENT, I AM MORE LIKELY TO GIVE MY BOSS.
I HOPE, YOU WILL GET YOUR BAG LOST SOON, SEE YOU LATER.
The letter is somewhat logically organized, but the flow of information could be improved. The introduction, body, and conclusion are not clearly distinct, and there is some repetition. Transitions between ideas are lacking, which makes the letter feel a bit disjointed.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing with a distinct introduction, body, and conclusion.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and flows logically.
- Use transitional phrases to connect ideas more clearly.
The letter uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some awkward or incorrect word choices. The use of all-caps for emphasis is not appropriate in formal writing.
The letter contains several grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. These errors can make the letter difficult to understand.
The letter addresses the task, providing details about finding a bag and the items inside it. However, the letter could be more concise and clear. The writer does not provide any details about how the owner can retrieve the bag, which was part of the prompt.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details about the situation, such as the location of the bag and the owner’s contact information.
- Include a clear explanation of how the owner can retrieve the bag, based on the prompt’s requirements.