You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The table illustrates the compairing six cities underground railway system, providing the details on their opening dates.
Overall, we can see that Tokyo has the highest annual passenger number, while London has a longest route, also Kyoto and Los Angeles has lowest passengers number, but at that time quite new opened date.
To begin, London’s underground opened in 1863, is the oldest system, carrying 775 million passengers annual and covering approximately 394 kilometres of route, 394 the most longest distance among all cities. Moreover, railway in Tokyo opened in 1927 has the highest number of people, 1927 million annually, followed by Paris with 1191 million passengers, ranking second place.
Looking for this table more detail we can see also quite new opened date railway in Los Angeles, in 2001, regardless to his new opened date it has more distance than in Kyoto
The essay is logically organized and the information flows in a coherent manner. However, there are some areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more complex sentence structures to provide a clear and detailed description of the data.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are some errors in article and preposition usage.
The essay provides a clear overview and makes relevant comparisons. However, the task could be more fully addressed by providing more detailed analysis and by making more specific comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more specific comparisons.
- Consider discussing the implications of the data or providing some analysis of the reasons behind the patterns that are observed.