You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Describe the training course you want to do Explain what the company could do to help you Say how the course will be useful for your job
Dear manager,
I am writing regarding an advertisement for a training course which will help me enhance my skills and benefit my role.
I had set a goal to advance my skills in my current work as a DevOps engineer, and this program is the perfect opportunity to gain in-depth knowledge on the topic. There is a company policy which helps employees enhance their skills by taking courses, attending seminars and further studies; I was hoping the company would support me in taking a course, Advanced DevOps, which will be provided by Udemy with a duration of 3 months. After the successful completion of the course, they will issue an online certificate which is recognized worldwide.
The course will give a deep knowledge of DevOps, which includes cloud computing, ansible scripting, serverless functions and various advanced DevOps topics. As you are aware, the company is planning to migrate all of the systems to the cloud in about 6 months, and it would be a challenging task for all of us. If I were to enroll in that training, I would be able to perform migration of some of the systems, and this will help reduce pressure from the team as well.
Thank you for your time and I am eagerly awaiting your positive response.
Sincerely,
Saajan Joshi
The letter is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words to improve the flow of your ideas.
- Make sure that each paragraph has a clear central topic.
The letter uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The letter demonstrates a good control of a range of grammatical structures, with only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect phrasing that could be improved.
The letter effectively addresses the task, providing a clear and relevant explanation of how the training course could benefit the employee and the company. The writer’s goals are clearly stated, and the benefits of the course are well-explained. However, the letter could be improved by providing more specific examples of how the course could be applied in the employee’s role. Additionally, the employee should consider using a more formal salutation (e.g., “Dear [Manager’s Name],” instead of “$Dear manager,”) and addressing the manager by name to ensure a more professional tone.
Suggestions
- Consider providing more specific examples of how the course could be applied in your role.
- Make sure to address the manager by name to ensure a more professional tone.