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The charts below show the percentage of students at an adult dedication center taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts illustrates the proportion of students at an adult education center taking diverse courses which were available in 1985 and in this year.
Overall, courses of art and cookery have almost minimal changes, but only fitness and dance remained unchanged. Moreover, two courses, such as music appreciation and local history are eliminated, and courses of modern languages achieved the highest figures in 1985, however, this year the figures declined and in this year the most popular course is the newly introduced IT course.
In 1985, there were 6 kinds of courses. Course of European common languages like French, German and Spanish has 24%, almost quarter of the students the most students and it was the most popular course in 1985. Fitness and dance had 22% learners and art had 17%. The course where attenders master how to cook meals and course where teachers teach history had a small difference, 14 to 15 respectively. The lowest figure was 8% which was for music appreciation.
In the present year courses where learners can learn about music and history are removed, but education center newly introduced IT course and it became the most popular among the courses, It accounted for more than a quarter of the students. The proportion of students taking cookery increased to 19%. However, the students of art reduced to 15%. The proportion of students taking European languages decreased to 17%. But attenders of fitness and dance remained unchanged as in 1985.

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The essay presents information logically but lacks smooth transitions between ideas. Some comparisons are made, but the flow could be improved.

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  • Use linking words to improve transitions.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are repetitive or unclear.

The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors in verb tense and agreement.

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant comparisons, but some details are missing or unclear.

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  • Include more specific data points for clarity.
  • Ensure all relevant features are covered in detail.