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Many people today lead stressful lives, which affects their physical and mental health. How can individuals and society reduce stress and improve overall well-being?

Many people today lead stressful lives, which affects their physical and mental health. How can individuals and society reduce stress and improve overall well-being?
Majority of people today are living in stressful lives and this is causing to lack of physical and mental health. Addressing this will require a multifaceted approach both individually and societal.
First of all, every human being should establish doing regular exercises to manage their stress effectively. For example, if a person keeps doing some physical exercises for at least a day, any 10 minutes the susceptibility to stress-related diseases will absolutely be decreased gradually. Because, with the help of physical exercise your body releases endorphines, which have mood- boosted effects Sticking to the balanced diet, rich in fruits and vegetables, provides the body with nutrients that can cope with stress.
On the other hand, doing these exercises lonely can have a less impact on people’s lives. There must be some regulations or initiatives that support work- life balance, such as flexibility in some workplaces genereous
vacation time employees or giving some opportunities to improve their overrall well-being with no charge, community initiatives can also help with this problem to be tackled with creating kind of event that make people aware of how living in a stressful lives can be harmful or making some green areas for local people to feel relaxed.
In conclusion, reducing stress and depression requires both individual and societal regulations. By creating these opportunities we can live the life that is free of stress and depression.

6.0

The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the flow of ideas and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions
  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
  • Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are some errors in article and preposition usage, as well as some awkward phrasings.

The essay addresses the task and provides a relevant response to the prompt. However, the response could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples.

Suggestions
  • Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single idea or argument and is well-supported with specific examples.