Marjona
The maps illustrate the layout of Lynwich College in 2006 and it’s changed by the present day
Overall , following some changes the college has changed significantly with the addition of new facilities such as Cafeteria ,a bus stop, bike storage and sports center.Some areas like the sports field and car park were also modified to accommodate these changes.
In 2006 the college had two main buildings a library a sports field a car park and several trees, the two buildings were connected by a straight path and sports field was in the southeast , the car park was located in the Northeast corner the road
Currently ,there have been many changes.a cafeteria has been built in the Central area , with circular paths around it,a bus stop has been built next to the road,and bike storage has been added near the car park, the sports center is a new feature beside the library ,and this has made the sports field smaller.Some trees in the middle of the campus have been removed
The essay provides a general overview of the changes at Lynwich College and mentions specific alterations. However, the organization of information is somewhat inconsistent, and there are abrupt transitions between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Organize information logically.
- Ensure clarity in sentence structure.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the task, but there are some repetitions and minor errors.
The essay demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures with frequent errors in punctuation and sentence structure.
The essay addresses the task by describing changes to Lynwich College, but lacks detail in some areas and has minor inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Provide more detail on specific changes.
- Ensure accuracy in descriptions.