Process

The process shows the key stages of making clothes and shoes, which is made of animal skin.
Overall, in the process, we can see that use of the animal skin, there are 10 stages until the objects made.
Firstly, animal skin is dried and after that, the product is delivered to the factory. The following stage skin washed with water and lime then soaked with lime and the product is flattened.
Secondly, flatting the skin is soaked again with water and vegetable matter. Thirdly the product polished and sent to another factory. Finally, the products are ready to use.

5.0

The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the process. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to that topic.

The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are grammatically accurate. However, there are a few errors that affect the clarity of the writing.

The essay provides a clear overview of the process and adequately addresses the task requirements. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed explanations at each stage of the process.