The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006,Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The data presents the amount of transaction for several digital games types between 2000 and 2006.
overall, wilth most of digital games kinds are growth positively in every year, the console games are declining constantly. Handheld games are type of game with the greatest number of transaction. Both online games and mobile phone games are mostly have relatively same growth performance in each year.
Handheld games received a value of transaction in 2000 slightly under 12 billion dollars, then rose significantly in every year with slightly decrease in 2005, but going up again to reach almost 18 billion dollars in 2006. Just like handheld games, console games also emerge in 2000, but with starting value in slightly under 6 billion dollars then constantly decline in to the lowest level in 2006 with sales approximately 3 billion dollars.
2001 is the first emerge of online games transaction, with value seems about not reaching 2 billion dollars. Then in 2002 online games have the same amount of transaction with mobile phone games, but in 2003 mobile phone games is gaining more sales compare to online games. Both of the games type growth positively in 2004 and 2005, but in 2006 the online games, left the mobile phone games behind with its extentive increase that reach approximately 9 billion dollars of sales.
The essay provides an overview of the data but lacks clarity and logical flow. Transitions between ideas are not smooth, and some comparisons are unclear.
Suggestions
- Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
- Improve the logical flow between sentences.
- Ensure all comparisons are clearly stated.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, though some word choices are awkward or incorrect.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some data is inaccurately reported.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between game types.
- Ensure all data is accurately described.