The chart gives information about the average time (hours) a teacher spent teaching in three different school types in four countries in 2001. 1400 1300 1200 1100 1000 900 800 700 600 500 400 300 200 100 0 Japan Spain Iceland USA Primary Lower Secondary Upper Secondary
The bart chart illustrates the amount of time in hours a tutor spent in primary, lower secondary and upper secondary schools in different countries in 2001.
Overall, the given diagram highlights the teaching time in Japan, Spain, Iceland, and USA.
In all countries,the upper school was predominant, while the primary schools accounted for the lowest amount of time spent.
Regarding to Iceland primary and lower secondary schools were the lowest among other categories, with about 590 hours and approximately 610 hours, respectively. Moreover, the upper secondary was the second to position, with above 900 hours. Similarly, in Japan, teacher spent approximately 600 hours on primary, about 650 hours on upper secondary, and 700 hours on upper secondary school.
Moving to Spain, primary and lower secondary schools were about 650 hours and about above by 100 hours, respectively. However, teacher spent 900 hours on upper secondary school. Turning to the last country, in USA all categories were the dominant among other countries. The primary and lower secondary were about 750 and 1000 hours teacher has spent. The upper secondary was the top position, with below 1200 hours.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
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The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are some errors in article and preposition usage.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and examples.
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