The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph and table illustrate the average temperature per month and annual hours of sunshine in London,New York and Sydney.
Overall, New York experienced the highest and the lowest temperatures, additionaly having the significant number of sunshine hours. Additionaly, Sydneys monthly temperature showed a quite high temp,only encountering slight decrease in the middle of the year,while the reverse is true for London.
With regard to the line graph, Sydneys temp start with 25 degrees in January,this figure begins to decrease before April,reaching a low of 15 in the middle of the year. However,then temperature encounter gradual increase,coming to the previous number at the end. In contrast, New York and London begin year with freezing temperatures,at 5 and 10 degrees respectively. From this point, both figures steadily grow,but in juxtaposition with initial indixes, New York attain the highest number of 30 degrees per Celsius in July,whereas Londons number is lower(around 25). As for Sydney, monthly temp,closer to the end of year, slowly starts plummeting.
Focusing on the sunshine hours, the biggest amounts could be observed in New York and Sydney, but the formers time is above 2.500 and the latters is under. In contrast, Londons sun time is not even the half as that of New York.
The essay presents the information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing. Transitions between ideas are sometimes unclear.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different sections.
- Include more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and spelling errors.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, affecting clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparison and some inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between the cities.
- Ensure accuracy in describing data from the graph and table.