The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The graph compares the average monthly change in prices of metals: Copper, Nickel and Zinc over a specified period.
It is clear that Zinc had the most highest price between January and December, while Nickel was particularly expensive from January to February. However, the price of Copper showed no significant fluctuation throughout the year.
In January, Nickel was in the first place with a six percent increase in price,which was almost triple the amount of price sold by the second highest priced metal, Copper. Over the following 12 monts,however, Nickel’s price figure fell by approximately 5 percent, whereas Zinc saw costs rise by a similar amount in January. By January, Nickel had become the market leader with costs reaching 4 percent.
However, by March Nickels’s price hit the lowes point, dropping from a positive percent to -3. Also, value of Copper remained relatively stable, fluctuating 2 percent and almost 2 percent, for the entire a year period.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good overall progression.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your writing.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic usage. The vocabulary is generally used appropriately with some good collocations. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information and makes appropriate comparisons where necessary. The key features of the graph are identified and described, but the information is not always accurately or sufficiently detailed.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you provide a detailed and accurate description of all the key features of the graph.