The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This line graph illustrates the percentage of four recycled materials during a 28 year period in a specific country.
It is notable that the recycling rate of glass containers, aluminum cans, and plastics showed an upward trend between 1982 and 2010. As for the propotion of paper and cardboard fluctuated during the period.
The percent of paper and cardboard materials that ranked top in 1982 then rose and fell in the following eight years. In 1994, it experienced dramatic growth to 80 percent and steadily dropped to 70 percent as of 2010. However, after all the variety, it still taken the biggest part among all materials. The second place is glass containers; the line for this genre is also inconsistent. It declined from 50 percent to 40 percent from 1982 to 1990, and continuously increased to 60 percent in the end.
As for aluminium cans, it surged to 45 percent within the 28 year period from 5% in the 1982. Plastics in the last place steadily and slightly climb to 9 percent in 2010.
The essay is logically organized and the information is clearly and coherently presented. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are some errors in the use of articles and prepositions.
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed information on the trends of the four recycled materials. However, the essay does not provide any information on the fifth and sixth positions, which is a significant omission.
Suggestions
- Include a brief summary of the main trends at the beginning of the essay.
- Provide clear and accurate descriptions of the data, making sure to mention all relevant details.