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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given line graphs below illustrate the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four particular countries such as Eritrea, India, UK and Uruguay over a 10 year period of time from 2005 to 2015.
Overall, what stands out of the graph is that the number of subsciptions for mobile phone in UK and Urugway were the highest from their starting point in both graphs, meanwhile, in Eritrea the trend did not change during years in both the mobile and fixed phones. India showed some steady rise over time, but then remained constant in the second graph.
Initially, from 1995 in UK subscriptions composed 100 people and remained almost unchanged untill the end of the period. Talking about Eritrea, it can be seen that there was no any subscriptions from this country in both cases. In 2005 the applicants’ figure from India and Uruguay was 0 and 30 respectively. After that, the India’s trend experienced a marked increase from 0 to 80 and Uruguay’s from 30 to 150 between 2005 and 2015.
In the case of fixed phones, the UK figures with 60 applicants were the highest at both the beginning and end of the period, while India and Eritrea were the least with 0 subscriptions. Finally, Uruguay maintained the same level at 30 during this period.

5.0

The essay presents information in a somewhat logical order, but there are issues with clarity and cohesion. The transitions between ideas are not always smooth, and there is some repetition.

Suggestions
  • Use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
  • Use more varied linking words to improve flow.

The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision. Some word choices are incorrect or awkward.

The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions, affecting clarity.

The essay partially addresses the task but lacks sufficient detail and accurate data representation.

Suggestions
  • Include specific data from the graphs to support statements.
  • Ensure all countries and trends are accurately described.
  • Avoid incorrect data points and ensure consistency with the graphs.