The table and charts below give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006.
The table shows how many doctors worked in Australia from 1986 to 2006. The bar charts, meanwhile, compares doctors in terms of their sex and birth place.
Overall, it is clear that doctor numbers saw a dramatic increase in Australia, we can also see that there was a considerable in the percentage of female doctors. While the reverse was true for opposite gender.
Accordingto the table, the number of doctors in Australia witnessed a significant growth from 23,720 to 29.060 in 1996, after which it improved further to around 35 million in 2006.
Looking at the bar charts, we can see that the percentage of feminine doctors rose noticeably, from 25% to around 40%. While a figure for males experienced a noticeable decline, from 75% to 61%. What is more, starting just at 37% the percentage of foreign doctors grew rapidly, reaching its pick at 50%. By contrast, Australian doctors percentage decreased considerably, from approximately 60% to 50 in ears 1986 and 2006
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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and more complex vocabulary. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect word choices.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed and specific information.
Suggestions
- Include specific data from the charts and tables to support your overview.